That's a pretty solid story. Could have used a bit more description of the physical appearances of the two, but the actual sex was good.
I loved it! It made me long for some sweet pussy. YOu made it so real I could almost taste it.'
all the "try to be sensitive-stuff" seems a bit unnessesary considering the lame "I think I have a solution to your problem blablabla". This story suck, but then again most stories on this site is about one fifth the quality of the stories I usually read so maybe you shouldn't take it as something negative...
Think your stories over a bit first, write it, then read and edit it, then re-read and re-edit it, if you want to write a good story look at other things but the obvious as well . Don't forget to learn from others and their mistakes either, to be a great writer you should read alot, it helps when you are building sentenses. Build up a strong vocabulary, learn alot of synonumus words or alternative phrasings so that if you have to repeat yourself, it won't sound repetative.Good Luc
I liked it and fuck those who didn't keep makin more
A Good Man 6 ————————————————————————————————- Tom finally opened his eyes, the first thing he saw was Queen Iterne, then Frilly and finally the council. When he tried to sit up the throbbing in his...